hey thanks for linking this man, i thought i gave some of my thoughts on it
if i had to give one word to describe this single, its potential. the potential is really there. i feel like you have a lot of ideas and sound you want to try out, and that's totally fine. maybe you can take chunks of the song, whether it being a quiet ambient part or the thick bass and screeching guitar part (at the end) and just make it to one complete song, or even ep. although i haven't listen to any of your work, which i plan to evetually, i feel like this is pretty decent/good for an experimental single. lots of vairety and playing around with it. this is just my opinion and i hope you take it just for food for thought. keep up the good work man! i expect good things coming soon from you if you just keep praticing.